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Post by sLiCkViC on Nov 13, 2003 1:18:31 GMT -5
my vote goes to sinister mixer. way better flow. dude sirkibbles u need to work on ur rhymes. im sry man but ima newbie but hey i atleast noe how to rhyme way better and wid a better beat. ur beat was hard to follow
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Post by NorthKorean on Nov 13, 2003 3:28:14 GMT -5
Name: Gun-Ik
Comments: -wow anthony, you got better..haha..lots. -i feel so relieved to hear a flow with some offense in it..THANK YOU ANTHONY...that spit that shatters line...awesome. it woulda been kool if you made a "SubZero" theme and the flow related to mortal kombat...then yer ending would be "fatality"...that woulda been AWESOME -i have a feelin everyone knows who im votin for already...haha -kibbles...kibbles...wow. ok, first off, put your hand on the left side of your chest? feel that? its a heart BEAT...B-E-A-T...no offence but i had no sense of beat from yer flow...in the beg of it it was ok..but after you bombed it..like you got tired of writing? you coulda done a lot better. -also...offense..anthony won because he took some offense. its a LOT more appealing.
vote: xXSiNiStEr_MiXeRXx
Reason: (stated in my comments)
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Post by OVictorWangO on Nov 14, 2003 3:34:06 GMT -5
Man, there are some harsh critiques in this thread. People talk like they're ballers...
Anyway, I'll just critique Anthony's.
For every quadruplet by itself, your beat held up. But whenever you switched quadruplets, it felt like you switched beats too.
The beginning four lines felt like fillers needed to be added, or at least, the stresses had to be more consistent... so revision could have been made.
"My rhymes'll tear you apart methodically I can only say so explicitly Your rhymes'll make you evict from society As I tear through you with animosity Beat you through with such brutality You'll be a disgrace to the BGL community"
The first three lines above don't have a very consistent beat. Also, all these rhymes are very weak. The first three have loose two-syllable rhymes. The last three have stronger two-syllable rhymes. But the words all have at least four syllables! According to this scheme, any word with approximately an "ih-ee" sound could have been used, lending itself to too many choices. Not much creativity is needed because there are hundreds of words that end in an "ih-ee" sound, especially with rap's rhyming freedom. A greater challenge would have been to rhyme three or four syllables.
My city is gritty with no integrity. Collectively, this society is implicitly clipping free of the spreadsheets of the community's entity. And in this, we see how the quantity understandably tunnels 'neath where perspicacity is an absentee... etc.
Too much freedom should be avoided. The more complicated the rhyme is, the more appreciative the audience should be. Challenge yourself to learn!
Like rhyming "Tommy Lindsey." Well... all I know is his mommy's Hindi. My God, he's in deep, cuz he's a commie, indeed!
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Post by SirKibbles on Nov 14, 2003 18:58:01 GMT -5
Wow... you make a forum about rap and suddenly everyone's knows all there is to know about rap. I'm not directing this to anyone, but yet everyone. I've seen it time and time again. Victor to me is the only person that I feel I could actually learn something from on this site. You guys said I had no beat, right? Ever stop to think that I might have a beat that goes with it that none of you may be thinking of? You guys want the simple beats, things that are easy to follow... that's just how you get more and more weak mc's. Then there is one thing that makes me so damn mad... everyone here thinks rap must rhyme. Ahhh makes me wonder if anyone here has even really listened to rap...
And I'm not talking about that lil' john and the east side crap. That's not rap. That just ignorance taken to the next level.
Bye
MC[glow=green,2,300]SirKibbles[/glow]
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Post by OVictorWangO on Nov 15, 2003 3:02:37 GMT -5
I don't know what you can learn from me. I don't rap enough.
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Post by xXSiNiStEr_MiXeRXx on Nov 15, 2003 3:03:36 GMT -5
wait... let me see if i can point something out i could be wrong but hey its just my view. First of all isn't this actually a freestyle/freeflow forum? And isn't freestylin/freeflowin rhymin err flows...? Rap is the next level. and yes i agree that people can have their own beats that no one else would be able to comprehend while reading but none of us here are "rappers" therefore we don't go with the more free form of rap, that is the true form, if you want to put it that way. Everyone here goes for the more standard freestyle/freeflow type which is basically rhymin flow-etry lol that is used to just poke fun at others for fun. so to sum it up in my opinion: 1) Freeflows/freestyles- short, rhyming, sometimes simplistic beat flows that are more fun and amusing. 2) Rap- Self expression through songs that are usually from the heart i.e. Tupac, but recently as kibbles stated its ignorance to the next level? but yea we definetly are not rappers. This is a freestyle forum =) o and yes freeflows/freestyles are a form of rap just for clarification kind of like trance is a kind of techno =)
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Post by MasterMind on Nov 19, 2003 22:56:21 GMT -5
Voting has now ended. The Winner:[glow=Green,2,300]xXSiNiStEr_MiXeRXx[/glow] Congratulations xXSiNiStEr_MiXeRXx, you have won the battle! SirKibbles, you are the loser. Humiliation!Total:xXSiNiStEr_MiXeRXx: 17 votes SirKibbles: 0 votes Knock Out[/i][/u][/color]
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